Peer Review Draft for Unit 3
April 28, 2008
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Below is my peer review draft.
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121paeb | April 28, 2008 at 7:10 pm
Written Peer Response
Essay writer’s name: Altea Peer’s name: Patrice
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
It was a good critique.
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
NO
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay?
Anyone looking for more information on the film “A Walk to Remember”.
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
Anyone who is old enough to understand a movie review and appreciate it.
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. The analysis of the plot and the characters
b. The comparison of other movies the actors were in
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
A walk to remember is a great film, but has some minor flaws.
Is the thesis specific enough? YES
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES Par. 5 YES
Par. 2 YES Par. 6 YES
Par. 3 YES Par. 7 YES
Par. 4 YES Par. 8 YES
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
Yes
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES :
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES :
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
None
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES .
Present the thesis? YES
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES
d. Comments: Captures the mood of the article right off the back, which is good.
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES
b Provide something new to think about? YES
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES
d. Comments: A solid ending.